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Advice on writing essay/story/article/speech.

Tone (personal essay)

I love this cartoon from Natalie Dee on fanpop.com

Before Christmas I got my TYs (over 50 of them) and my Leaving Certs to write personal essays. Their essays for the most part were funny, sad, moving, at times mad and in many cases very very brave. Among other things I read about a childhood obsession with goldfish; a superhero granny; being an only child; falling into a river in front of the boy you absolutely love love love; suicide; a haunted church; spontaneous uncontrollable crying spells; and being wrapped in tin foil and carried off a volleyball court on a stretcher…

I also discovered that “a commode is the love child of a wheelchair and a portaloo!

I did notice however that very occasionally a personal essay didn’t ‘ring true‘. It’s hard for me to explain how I knew that the writer was inventing or embellishing a sad story (leaning towards or sometimes completely inventing a fiction) rather than drawing on real life experiences (fact) but when I asked a couple of students about it sure enough they said what they’d written about hadn’t actually happened but they felt compelled to give the personal essay a tragic ending in order to engage the reader emotionally.

Oddly, it had the opposite effect – I enjoyed these essays up to the point where they transformed into melodrama and then I just somehow knew that the writer was trying to force a reaction out of me.

Have a look at this beautiful personal essay – but be warned:

(1) It will make you cry

and

(2) You could never write this. You are not a thirty-something-yr-old widower with a toddler and a dead wife. You are a 17 or 18yr old Irish leaving cert student and this is the perspective you MUST write from when you write a personal essay in the exams because fundamentally a personal essay IS NOT A SHORT STORY and IS NOT FICTION. Of course you can write about something funny that happened to someone else and pretend it happened to you; of course you can exaggerate for dramatic or humorous effect. But try to write what you know or your essay is in danger of coming across as insincere and false.

Here it is: http://www.guardian.co.uk/lifeandstyle/2013/jan/19/telling-toddler-mummys-dead?CMP=twt_gu

Now have a look at this personal essay, whose tone is much more philosophical and opinionated rather than emotional – the tone is completely different but there is no question that it also falls into the category of personal essay.

Here it is (with the longest url in the history of life the universe and everything):

http://www.theglobeandmail.com/news/national/education/an-a-student-regrets-his-grades/article7359620/?cmpid=rss1&utm_source=feedburner&utm_medium=feed&utm_campaign=Feed:%20TheGlobeAndMail-National%20%28The%20Globe%20and%20Mail%20-%20National%20News%29&buffer_share=8b014

I guess I just want you to realise that you can write a serious opinion piece; an emotional admission; or a funny satire and ALL will still qualify as ‘personal essays’ as long as you write in the first person (“I”) and as long as you are yourself (Irish teenager) not a fictional narrator (a witchdoctor, a talking rubbish bin or a homeless wino).

For clarification of the difference between the personal essay and memoir check this out: http://meghanward.com/blog/2012/08/21/personal-essay-vs-memoir/

That’s all for now folks. Good luck with the mocks revision!

 

Seeing Blind

For their house exam, my students have 1hr 30mins to write a work of inspired creative genius. So no pressure then! They’ll have to choose between a speech, a debate, a personal essay, a newspaper article or a descriptive essay and they have no idea what the topics will be… eek! (I’ll post them here on Friday after the exam).

So today, with the exams looming tomorrow, they asked me how the hell they can prepare. As well as revising the stylistic features required of each genre (speech, article, personal essay, descriptive writing) and the six rules of essay writing, here’s what we came up with:

How to prepare when you don’t know what the topic will be…

  • List of personal anecdotes you might use… (remember sights, sounds, smells, taste, touch)
  • List of quotes you might use…
  • List of techniques you will use…
  • List of official organisations (O.E.C.D., E.R.S.I., W.H.O., C.S.O..) & names of Ministers of State (minister for education, minister for children, minister for social affairs etc). When making up quotes and stats from experts give the person a title and attach them to a university or organisation to make them sound believable…
  • Ideas on topical issues (see this list) plus any quirky news stories that catch your eye!
  • Funny jokes! (if you’re writing a more lighthearted piece you might be able to work one in to your essay)

Update: as promised, here are the essay topics my students faced into for their house exams on Friday last:

Write a composition on any ONE of the following:

1. “Write a lighthearted speech, to be delivered to your classmates, on your pet hates in life

2. “Write a newspaper article in which you uncover and expose a scandal

3. “Write an entertaining descriptive essay for a competition under the title “If I ran this school“.

4. “Write a debate speech in which you argue for or against the motion that “The future of publishing is digital” (I got this from a mock paper)

5. “Write a personal essay entitled “I’m weird but that’s OK“.

 

 

 

Y’all got opinions???

So it’s a Sunday night and I’m doing some planning for Leaving Certs first class tomorrow morning.

I feel like they’ve nailed what’s required for the Language of Information: get directly to the point and cram as much info as possible into as few words as possible; use uber-formal language; pay close attention to layout using headings, sub-headings, bullet points or numbering and a variety of font sizes; finally avoid offering opinions as you’re supposed to present the info in an easily accessible and completely unbiased format.

Now we’ve got to really get to grips with being a hyper-confident opinionated so & so (AKA the Language of Argument) which funnily enough is something I’ve never had much of a problem with 😉

First of all I think all students need to get into the zone where they HAVE opinions on at least some of the great ethical, political and philosophical issues which have plagued the greatest minds of every generation for centuries. Three of the girls in the class have a headstart on the others because they were involved in the Concern debates for the last two years but I’m willing to bet they’ll all be surprised how strongly they feel about certain issues once they get stuck in.

We started on Friday with a comprehension from the 2009 exam paper “Should zoos be closed“. Next I think we’ll all take the test on www.politicalcompass.org to get the brain juices flowing. It asks you a series of questions designed to figure out whether you are left or right wing when it comes to economic decisions and political systems and whether you believe in lots of decision-making from on high (authoritarian) or the individual’s right to make personal, social and ethical decisions for themselves (libertarian).

Once the girls have their personal political identity nailed to a little chart like this one, I’ll present them with a series of debate topics and pair them off with one student proposing, one opposing the motion. Then the hard work begins; the research, the drafting, the rewriting and then presenting their ideas to the class!

Here are the debate topics I’ve come up with, a mixture of topical issues that have featured in the media recently and issues raised by politicalcompass.org

Write a debate speech in which you argue for or against one of the following motions:

Same sex marriage should be legalised across Europe”

In certain situations military intervention is a moral imperative”

Embryonic stem cell research is dangerous and wrong”

Discrimination against Travellers is culturally accepted in Ireland”

Assisted suicide should be available to the terminally ill”

Political correctness has prevented us from really tackling the obesity crisis”

Mental illness remains a taboo subject in Ireland”

Pornography makes sexual attacks on women more acceptable”

Addiction to the internet is a real and present danger in our society”

Unemployment benefit should be reduced the longer a person remains on the live register”

Capitalism serves corporations not people”

Those with private health insurance have the right to higher standards of medical care”

Surveillance of individuals using CCTV footage and long lens cameras has gone too far”.

Of course all of this will require lots of brain power and we are talking about first class Monday morning so I’m fully expecting these faces when I break the news that they’ve got another essay to do!!!

 

 

“Appropriate” topics…

I recently received this email query and I think the answer might be relevant to lots of you out there.

The question was as follows:

I’m just wondering, what is your opinion on how personal a personal essay should be? Like if I was to include stories about growing up as a gay teen/ break ups/ family etc, does that just come off as a sob story or will it annoy the examiner? Also, in terms of articles, is it best to stay away from controversial issues like the church and gay rights? Obviously this is presuming its relevant to to the title given!”

And I replied:

A personal essay should be very personal. It should feel ‘real’ to the examiner. So yes, deal with your experiences of discrimination, relationships etc…
To avoid creating an annoying sob story, don’t just identify problems, offer solutions. Also, another way to get the reader onside and not sound full of irritating self-pity is to make fun of yourself. I love people who are willing to mock their own faults and failings, it makes them more human, more likable. What really matters is that your essay is WELL WRITTEN, regardless of the content, and as someone who is gay, you probably have an interesting perspective to offer that the examiner may not have read before.
However, remember, just because it’s TRUE doesn’t make it entertaining for the reader – again, self-mockery and offering some solutions as well as identifying problems are two ways to make your essay more enjoyable for the reader… plus, think not just about WHAT you write but also about HOW you write. List the techniques you intend to use, tick them off as you use them!
As for whether or not you should discuss controversial topics in your newspaper article, provided they are relevant to the title, absolutely. 
Again, however, it is vital to remember that HOW you write is as important – in fact MORE important – than what you write.
All journalists when researching a story will interview eye-witnesses and/or experts on the topic under discussion. They’ll include quotes from these ‘interviews’ they’ve conducted (feel free to make them up). They’ll also prove that they know their topic & have thoroughly researched it by including relevant statistics (for example, in your case possibly the number of gay people in Ireland v’s the number who are ‘out’, the percentage of gay people in long term relationships, the number who have children etc).
Again, you can make these up in the exam but they MUST sound realistic. A good example of a stat that doesn’t sound realistic is if you say that 87% of teenagers smoke. The real stat is closer to 20% and an examiner is likely to know this (just from paying attention to the universe…)
Hope this helps some of you about to launch into exams season.
Evelyn

Improve your grammar!

I’ve just come across this website which helps you to practice almost every error I come across in students’ writing. It’s particularly useful because it will give you immediate feedback and an explanation if you get something wrong.

Pay particular attention to fused sentences and sentence fragments. These mistakes will cost you dearly so sort it out!Also the classic error with apostrophes is to just leave them out because you’re not sure whether or not to use them, so it’s probably a good idea to sort that out too while you’re at it!

http://www.chompchomp.com/

Here’s another site that gets you to play a fun game so you can identify the parts of a sentence:

http://www.kwarp.com/portfolio/grammarninja.html