If this is how you feel when you think of the comparative, you are not alone, so don’t panic. I’ll try my best to simplify what is actually the most complex essay structure on the course.

There are two fundamental errors you’re in danger of making when writing your comparative answers.

1. You fail to answer the question.

2. Your links are weak and superficial.

It’s impossible to know what the question will be until you open the paper, but if you want to see what type of questions generally come up, click here on ‘Theme or Issue questions‘, ‘Literary Genre questions‘ and ‘General Vision and Viewpoint questions‘ (note: these are the modes for 2012, they’ll be different if you’re doing the leaving in 2013).

So let’s imagine the question is “What did you enjoy about exploring the general vision & viewpoint of the texts you studied?”

This is the kind of answer that will get you a D2:

“I really enjoyed studying the general vision and viewpoint of my three texts. The opening scene of DAL is quite nostalgic as Michael looks back on his childhood in Donegal but it’s also pessimistic because he says things weren’t really what they seemed and he mentions Fr. Jack coming home but not being nearly as impressive as they expected. We then see the Mundy sisters together, they are a close family but Kate tends to boss them around and the others resent this, particularly Agnes. When she decides they can’t go to the harvest dance the sisters are pissed off but Kate thinks it wouldn’t be right. Similarly the opening scene of IID is quite pessimistic. Michael sits on his own in Carrigmore home for the disabled and he can’t communicate because he is handicapped and can’t speak properly. He tries to warn one of the workers that there’s a cable that might get snagged and someone will trip but they don’t understand what he’s trying to say. He seems really frustrated and I would hate to be in his situation. The first scene in HMB is also pessimistic. Alec is waiting to die and he won’t get in touch with anybody in his family to tell them what’s happening. He doesn’t seem to even care and when the priest comes in he sends him away after making jokes about his own death. So I enjoyed seeing how awful some people’s lives can be because mine is way better and that made me happy”

Before you read on, I made up this answer. So no I’m not slagging off a real student’s work.

What’s wrong with this answer? Let me count the ways:

  1. Question is thrown in at the beginning and end of the paragraph but no effort is made to actually engage with the question.
  2. Sentences go on – and on – and on. The writer clearly has no control over what they’re trying to say. It comes out as a stream of consciousness ‘vomit’ onto the page.
  3. Informal conversational language and slang “she bosses them around” “pissed off” “he doesn’t even care” “mine is way better”
  4. Inaccurate and vague details: “handicapped” instead of “cerebral palsy”, “can’t speak properly” instead of “has a speech impediment”, “he says things weren’t as they seemed” instead of including the quote “I had an awareness of a widening breech between what seemed to be and what was”, reference to the “priest” instead of the “padre”.
  5. Texts dealt with separately with superficial links barely established “similarly” “also”.
The simplest way for me to explain why this is the greatest mistake you can make is through a knitting analogy. Have a look at this stripy jumper:

Each colour is knitted separately. They only touch briefly.

Now let’s say white represents the times when you’re talking about all three texts.

Dark grey represents DAL.

Light grey represents HMB.

Purple represents IID.

Each section exists on its own, never mingling with the other colors, only briefly linking with them, perhaps for a line or sometimes just for a single stitch (or ‘link’). All of the ingredients are there but they never get mixed up together. In fact you could just take out each color and knit four separate jumpers if you wanted to.

Now let’s have a look at how to do it properly:

“Studying the general vision and viewpoint of my three texts offered me a fascinating insight into the quiet lives of desperation many people lead and I found myself on tenterhooks, rooting for the central characters as they attempted to create a better life for themselves. The opening scene of DAL is full of nostalgia as Michael the narrator launches into a flashback of the summer when Fr. Jack returned from the missions. Despite the closeness of the family unit (Michael remembers his aunts dancing wildly to the music from the wireless) there is an aura of mystery and foreboding, an awareness “of a widening breach between what seemed to be and what was”. This aura makes DAL in many ways similar to HMB (from the beginning of both texts the reader feels something bad is about to happen) but the atmosphere of fear and foreboding are much more pronounced in HMB. The opening scene fills us with unease as Alec waits to die. Unlike the Mundy sisters (DAL) we have no sense that he feels close to his family – in fact he bluntly admits “I love no living person, I am committed to no cause…I have not communicated with either my father or mother”. I found his indifference to his plight deeply unsettling. Thus although I felt compelled to read on, I cannot say I ‘enjoyed’ watching him suffer. The same is true of IID, where the central character’s difficulties fill the reader with sympathy. Michael’s cerebral palsy and speech impediment isolate him from the other residents but what makes this film subtly (yet significantly) different to HMB is that in IID we can see Michael’s frustration, through a series of close-ups of his face as he tries to communicate with Eileen and warn her of the impending accident (he has seen a vacuum cable snag and knows it will trip someone up). By contrast Alec (HMB) expresses no desire to escape the awful situation he finds himself in. Yet there are also interesting similarities between HMB and IID , for example the complete lack of family support and in some ways this makes DAL the most positive of the three – no matter what their difficulties at least the Mundy sisters have each other.  Thus I can honestly say that all three texts captured my imagination, roused my curiousity and engaged my sympathy for the central characters in the opening scene, thus adding to my enjoyment and compelling me to read (or watch!) on.

Why is this so good by comparison?

  1. The question is fully engaged with throughout by the writer.
  2. Sentences are complex but highly controlled (writer uses brackets if adding something significant that would make the sentence unwieldy).
  3. Formal language of critical analysis is used at all times.
  4. Details are accurate and specific, including occasional use of quotes (perhaps four or five in total in your essay is more than sufficient).
  5. Texts are interwoven; links are complex, recognising obvious similarities and differences but also going further to establish subtle distinctions.

Again the knitting analogy is useful.

This pattern also has all of the ingredients necessary but if you look at the body of the jumper (ignore the sleeves) you’ll see that the person knitting this jumper begins a line with one color but then switches to another – or sometimes switches to a different colour for one line but then switches back again.

In your essay the texts need to be interwoven in this way. You need to establish complex links. You can keep your basic pattern – I’ll mostly discuss DAL, then HMB, then IID – but you must be willing to link them in subtle and meaningful ways. If the examiner feels like they could easily separate your essay out into three separate essays (unravelling this jumper would be a lot more complicated than unravelling the one above) then you have a problem.

With ONE NOTABLE EXCEPTION.

If you chose to answer a 30 / 40 mark split you will deal with one text entirely on it’s own.

 So let’s say this cream jumper represents DAL.

You completely ignore the other two and just discuss DAL on its own.

 

 

Then when you move on to the 40 mark discussion of your other two texts (HMB and IID in this example) you weave the two texts together. In this example, the charcoal can be HMB and the light grey can be IID. You can occasionally refer back to DAL (cream) but not in any great detail.

Pay attention to how the question is phrased. If it says “in the light of your discussion above” then you must deal with the same ideas, issues etc.. If it doesn’t you don’t have to – but it’s probably easier.

I have no idea if that makes things any clearer but I don’t know any other way to make you aware of how important it is to have interwoven your texts together, rather than simply treating them as three separate entities. Ultimately, answering the question asked and having in-depth quality comparisons (both similarities and differences) make the difference in doing well or doing badly in comparative studies.

 

 

 

19 Responses to Cracking the comparative ;-)

  1. Brendha says:

    Thanks, this is really helpful. :’)

  2. sunil gautam says:

    Yea I found this helpful as well.Thanks Evelyn.

  3. Heather says:

    Thank you so much! I was just wondering, in the good example you wrote, would that really constitute a paragraph in an essay or would you break it down? thank you 🙂

  4. aisling says:

    hi just wondering when we’re comparing our three texts at the start of our essay do we have to first say what the 3 texts are and then say we are shortening their names if we are eg. DAL for dancing at lughnasa?

    • Yep, look at the example I’ve given here http://leavingcertenglish.net/2011/04/comparative-essay-structure-2/ – you’ll see that I’ve included the genre (play, novel, film), the author/director and the full title with the shortened version in brackets. This is how I’d suggest you do it. Some people prefer “The three texts I have studied are …… – personally I find this a little blunt but it works perfectly well and shouldn’t lose you marks in the exam… Hope that answers your question!

  5. Aaron says:

    Hey, I was just wondering, in the exam it asks you to compare “at least two” texts. So does this mean if you only compare two texts in your essay, eg. “The Great Gatsby and Casablanca” will you get marked fully on just them two texts? Or will you lose a tonne of marks for not including a third text you studied, say “Dancing at Lughnasa”? thanks for the help! 😀

    • At least two allows you to decide for yourself whether you want to discuss just two or all three. Obviously if you only discuss two you’ll discuss them in more detail but you will be marked solely on the quality of your response and your engagement with the question. You WILL NOT LOSE ANY MARKS provided the question EXPLICITLY states “at least two”. This happens all the time at ordinary level but only occasionally at higher level. Hope that helps!

  6. Jack says:

    If you do the split question how long should the 30 mark section be and how long should the 40 mark section be

    • First decide how much you can write in 1hr 10 mins. This varies hugely from student to student. Let’s say you can write 5 pages, then write 2 or a little more for the 30marks and 3 for the 40marks. If you write fast or have big writing and can get 8 pages written (remembering quality over quantity is what counts!)then write 3 and a half for 30 marks and 4 and a half for 40 marks. I think most students fall somewhere in the range of 5 – 7 pages for comparative. In my opinion, unless your writing is enormous (6 words per line or less) any more than this is too much – but that’s just my opinion, I’m not entirely sure every teacher would agree with me. I’ve always been someone who didn’t write a lot in exams – I’m a slow writer, possibly because I’m left-handed – but everything I wrote was of a high quality and was directly relevant to the question asked at all times. Hope that helps answer your question, best of luck tomorrow.

  7. Rohaan says:

    Evyln let me start off by saying you’re absolutely gorgeous. #iloveyou

    Okay, back to business..

    Regarding the comparative question, I was taught to answer it in a text by text fashion which consists of starting of with 3/4 of a page on one text, 1 and 1/2 on another and finally 2 pages on third text while comparing/contrast simultaneously. I’m just wondering what text should I start off with… the one i can write the least about? Thanks

    • You my friend obviously realise that flattery is more likely to get a response, so I applaud you on your use of persuasive techniques! As teachers, we have never been given a ‘correct’ way of structuring the essay nor is one offered in the marking scheme, so there are a variety of approaches out there. Two things are however vitally important. The first is that you engage fully with the question asked throughout your answer. The second is that the quality of your links is supremely important (particularly to the extent that they are relevant to the question and engage with the question). If you intend to discuss one text on its own, I suggest you choose the 30 / 40 mark split question which specifically asks you to discuss one text on its own and two texts together. In this case the text you know best is the one you’d discuss for 30 marks and you’d discuss the other two for the 40 mark part of the question. What you need to absolutely avoid is choosing the 70 mark question and then writing 3 separate essays. Remember it’s called comparative for a reason. You get marks for the comparisons you make, not for your knowledge of individual texts. I presume this is why you’ve said that the way ye’ve structured your answer each discussion is progressively longer than the last so that you can link back to what you’ve said previously and create these links and comparisons as the essay progresses. If done well there’s no reason why this wouldn’t work but bear in mind – answering the question matters and links really really matter. Hope that helps!

  8. Katie says:

    How would you answer a question like this : In the beginning of the novel, Alec says –
    “I love no living person.”
    From your reading of the novel, do you think that this is true? Explain your answer with reference to the text. ?

    • I guess this comment suggests that the only person he truly loved in life – Jerry – is now dead. By making this statement he’s saying that he doesn’t love his mother Alicia or his father (or possibly his father) Frederick but remember he is tired and emotional and about to die when he makes this statement. You must make your judgement across the entire novel, not just based on this moment. Do you think he loved his parents at any point in the novel? Does he stop loving them at some point or is there some other reason why he doesn’t communicate with them as he awaits his execution??? Hope that helps!

      • Katie says:

        Yes it does thank yo so much. Also I would really appreciate if you could help me with two more questions I have a big test coming up and I really don’t know what I’ll write it on. I’m stressing out! The questions are : Explain what you find most interesting about major glendinning, and the second question is : in your opinion why does jerry decide to join the army? Thank you so much for your help so far !

  9. […] And of course the most important thing is to tie them together just like a stripy jumper would be knitted. (One jumper represents one paragraph – this analogy is thanks to Ms E. O’Connor. More on that can be found here.) […]

  10. Gerard says:

    Just wondering, when your answering a gvvp question (70mark) would it be alrite to compare under the paragraph headings of opening, key relationships and closing section? Thanks!

    • It depends what the question is. For example, if the question was ‘the general vision and viewpoint of a text is often revealed through the various ways characters treat each other’ then you’re on to a winner. However, if the question said ‘the general vision and viewpoint of a text shapes the reader/viewers experience of and response to the characters and society depicted’ then your interpretation – beginning, relationships, end – might limit your ability to respond to the question. It’s all about responding to the question asked…

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